Post Seminar and Photography Department Presentation:
Both presentations were in preparation for the all faculty presentation this Friday, November 4.
Feedback I received from Seminar:
- Less individual imagery on multiple slides-- combine and maybe edit/crop images to not show the entire image but give "previews" of images in a series
- Pay more attention to cleaning up the design and content of the slides-- if there is text, accompany it with image or graphics and shorten/simplify it
- Don't include all images, just a "taste" of the imagery
- Clean up mock-up of exhibition
- Artist Inspiration put in beginning of presentation and make more image-heavy
- Offer a short bio of how I came to photo-documentary (maybe include images on a slide)
- Make it shorter and ask more questions of the faculty, let them have a conversation with me
Feedback I received from Photo Department:
- Focus on the main overarching theme of the series and hone in on articulating concisely how it is being communicated through the images
- It is okay for me to incorporate myself and my experience as part of the series and explanation
- Have slides of images continuously rolling and talk whilst images are rolling behind
- Image heavy, little text on slides, instead just talk through any text you would include on ppt
- Include some examples of the text I may incorporate in book and on exhibition-- quotes from interviews
- Simplify explanations and the "so what" thesis statement to be a concise sentence
- What do I want to say? What do I want people to see from my images? How do I want people to engage / interact with the exhibition? What do I want people to feel / think / take away from exhibition?
- Quantify: how many images will be framed, how big, how many quotes/text, how big a book, what do I have now and what do I still need
- Explain work still needing to be done: going back to Kylemore during winter break, taking formal portraits, home life / meals, further interviews with specific questions, essence of time apprenticing and mentored in creating a photo book
- alluding to the longer term goal for this project-- that this series can exist in many forms and communicate a variety of themes and that it will continue to exist beyond April and will be a recurring project I plan to pursue for as long as the nuns let me
I received some conflicting feedback in terms of how to structure and design my powerpoint between the two presentations but other than that I plan to incorporate a vast majority of the feedback from both presentations. Some of the major things I have focused on in revising my presentation and preparing for the all-faculty presentation:
- Simplify! Make clean, clear and concise
- Emphasize main images and imagery and possibly main text incorporated
- Simple statements, explain in quick, short sentences the thesis and themes
- Quantify: explain vision and what I have planned to have completed
- What still needs to be done/what I have planned to do-- Kylemore visit, book apprenticeship
- Brief: Main Artist Inspo and Previous Work Preluding this project